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I think it’s a good idea but a couple of things to add:

Firstly I’d wait for a few days: if it goes out this week, it will be lost in the mire of panic and all the PR from the firms stating their positions. Wait til the dust settles and it will have more impact IMO.

Secondly, isn’t it the “Port Security” Bill rather than the “Safe Port” Bill? Could be wrong.

Finally, I think the paragraph that starts “The bill was passed using methods that question American beliefs and rights.” should be rewritten personally as this doesn’t quite grab as well as something like “The Bill appears to contradict the Freedom Of Choice ethic that the USA is so proud of, with politicians effectively forcing a moral judgement on the citizens of America”

It’s a good PR by the way, but if it had a bit more of a “third party” investigative journalism slant, it may have more impact.

Cheers

Simmo!